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Vey: The Beginning

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Post by Kronos314 Wed Jul 23, 2014 11:22 pm

Name: Michael Indigo
Species: Human
Nickname: Vey 
Gender:Male

Appearance:He wears a hoodie with dark purple and blue swirls,blue pants, and black boots. Has deep red scars on his neck from an incedent when he was 13.His voice sounds barely above a whisper most of the time,but turns to a gravely chilling drone when it is forced to be louder. His eyes are a sky blue with electric sparks flashing every few seconds and his hair is a shiny oak brown.

Likes: Running,Apples,fair fights and reading.

Dislikes: Being still,Pickles,Stupid conversations,high places,confined places.

Occupation: Merc. Only accepts jobs from good people though.

Personality:Quiet most of the time,but quick to anger. Is generally kind and polite to those who are also kind,and it takes more than simple teasing and bad attitudes to get him mad,but when he is,he is not afraid to tear the person apart if they deserve it. 

Powers/Strengths: Can control and abosrb Electrical,radioactive,thermal,and radient. (Light Waves) energy waves. Using this energy,he automatically has his speed and strength enhanced. He is more of a power player than a speed player with high defensive and offensive abilities.

Weaknesses: He is gullible when nothing seems dangerous.He isn't very much of a thinker,often rushing in to a battle without thinking on how to actually win. He also can overload on energy. When this happens,massive amounts of pain wash over him and he loses control. The energy jumps between anything that conducts it and it causes a massive explosion.

Positive Relations: His relations with the people he works with alot. Like his Info guy,Mike Alozova. Guy's like a father figure to him as he is in his upper 50's.

Negitive Relations: (This one's a Sorta) Nick "Bone" Indigo,Mike's brother. Kinda a jerk,but he does still love his brother and the same goes for Anon. Bone is ihghly trained ex military,with knowledge of many weapons,vehicles,and major terrorists."Ombra",a creature of darkness. He cares not about the lives of others. No one knows what he looks like,but most fear him,and for a good reason. He can control shadows,make them knives,spears,daggers,Etc. He is weak to large amounts of UV rays,which will make him burn and shrivel.

Michael Indigo lived with his Mother,Father,and Brother when he was a child. His mother was caring,his father supportive. His brother was a pain sometimes,but was still loved all the same. Mike went for a walk one day on the first day of summer. School had been let out,and kids were biking around and hanging out. He passed a Warehouse like he did every day when he walked down this sidewalk. The normally abandoned building had blue lights glowing behind the dirty and stained windows. His mind racing,he thought about what might be going on. When his intrigue got the better of him,he jumped the fence around the warehouse and crept towards the building. He peeked around a corner of the building,looking for any signs of danger. When he found none,he walked cautiously to a door a few meters away. Mike peeked through a crack in the decaying wooden door and saw various machines and contraptions with electricity sparking from many wires. He stepped in,facinated by these machines. With eyes moving between machines,they rested on a control panel on the far end of the room. He jogged to it,looking over the Qwerty key board and other buttons that were glowing. He pressed the Start button and a massive screen lit up in front of him that he had not seen when it was off. He jumped back,then read the words on the screen."Project Vey" it read in blue font. Reading the description,it was said to enhance the abilities of a person and give them Energy Absorbtion/Control powers. Looking around,all of the machines were dusty and some had cobwebs covering them. "What is this all about..." He said in a quiet voice. He searched through some files and found a button that said "Activate". With a shrug he clicked it and a chair came from the shadows behind him and it restrained him with metal clamps and what felt like a metal collar around his neck. "Warining: This process will be painful. A tranquilizer will be administered." A female computer voice said. 'Oh Come on!' Mike thought as the chair released a syringe and many wires,the syringe injecting him with the tranq solution. His vison blurred,and his eyelids felt like one ton weights,steadily closing more and more until his eyes were closed and he was knocked out. The machines glowed a deep purple and began to whir,then roar and their glow brightned until they were like the sun. The energy was channeled by the wires and another syringe injected something in his neck. The energy caused his body to spasm while he was knocked out by the tranq. His eyes opened,but they were bright blue with small white sparks flashing on them. He screamed and tensed his muscles and concentrated with all his might. A warning siren sounded and massive amounts of energy fed back through the wires,overloading the machines and making them glow red. Soon,a few chemicals in the room were catching flame and the flame spread to the machines. The fire clung to the bottom of the machines due to the chemicals,and then the entire building erupted in a searing inferno. Various pieces of debris rained down on the street,men women and children taking cover in the nearby Supermarket. With a loud and thick 'SLAP' Mike landed on the ground in the street,red streaks running down his neck and throughout his body. Police and ambulances arrived,manuvering around the debris. An ambulance stopped in front of Michael and two paramedics jumped out,carrying him to the back of the ambulance. They stopped the bleeding from his skin wounds,but could do no more. With that,they sped off to the nearest hospital for more medical help. They set up Mike with a painkiller on a drip and in a bed with covers up to his chin. He was asleep,his body growing and becoming denser with muscle. He awoke 4 years later with lazy eyes. He became more and more awake,and the numbness on his neck and on the inside of his throat were bothering him,so he held his throat. He removed his hand a found it covered in blood. Just then a Doctor and several nurses rushed in due them monitering his heart-rate monitor.When they were done,he had white gauze wrapped around his neck not too tight. The Doctor handed him a white board and a marker and said "You can't talk. Your vocal cords were severed. For now,use that whiteboard to communicate.". Several hours later the Doctor and Mike's family enetered the room. He gave a curt nod and left to give them some privacy. He wrote on his board "Who are you? Why am i in a hospital?". He had no idea who they were. In fact he had no idea of who HE was,and WHEN he was. All he could remember was a word. Vey.His Family was devastated at his memory loss and he was looked over and treated over the course of three days. The doctors were amazed at how fast he had healed,though his voice was never going to come back. They had removed 3 pieces of metal embedded in his throat. He had had several broken ribs,a fractured skull,internal organ damage,and a major concussion. They had said that they were suprised at the fact that he only had THOSE injuries. From what the Police could guess, he was the closest one to the explosion on the sidewalk. No one knew he went inside the building,not even Mike. He walked out of the Hospital,leaving his family. He still didn't beleive anything they said. How could he? They were strangers to him now. With some clothes donated from the hospital to him,he went out. He walked back in a bad part of town,unsure where to go. He had some money from the government for people like him who woke up from a long Coma. He knew he needed more,so he asked around and he found a little coffee shop that was hiring. When they asked his name,he said with hesitation "Vey". He learned about his powers from a nasty incident with a mugger. He shocked him so bad he paralyzed him,though he blamed an exposed electric line,which there was one on the side of the building. From there,he left the town and practiced his powers. He learned that he could use many different kinds of energy. He became a mercenary later on when he turned 20,after 3 years of training and doing odd jobs to earn money. He was a lone wolf Merc,known for his purple and blue clothing. Later,he met another powered Merc, Ombra. The two have been bitter enemies every since they fought for the bounty of a Russian politic.


Last edited by Kronos314 on Thu Nov 27, 2014 2:00 am; edited 20 times in total (Reason for editing : Rules Broken...Decided to go with a completly different story. Afraid to break more rules.... T_T)
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Post by DeuxExDimensia Sun Sep 21, 2014 11:50 pm

Kronos314 wrote:Gender:Male

Name:Anon Paradox
Species: Hedgehog
Nickname: None

Niiiit piiiiick, but why's Gender above name, species and nickname?

Kronos314 wrote:Appearance:Black fur which curves up.Wears a gray coat,gray pants,black gloves,black and blue goggles,and gray shoes. In public he wears nothing but black and a mask that makes his face unable to be seen,with a hood,casting the illusion of nothingness in his hood. Has scars on his neck from an incedent when he was 13 and is unable to speak as a result. His eyes are obsidion with silver flecks.

Appearance: Black, Black and Black. And for diversity, gray.

Black is a fine color but yawn, add in a splash of something else maybe? Maybe another dark, faded color but.. not grey. Maybe deep purple or blue or something.

Kronos314 wrote:Likes: Running,Apples,fair fights and reading.

Likes are fine.

Kronos314 wrote:Dislikes: Being still,Pickles,Stupid conversations,Anoyying people,Arrogant people.

Dislikes are fine. Annoying and arrogant people is a little obvious though. No one likes annoying or arrogant people.

Kronos314 wrote:Personality:Quiet most of the time,but quick to anger. Is generally kind and polite to those who are also kind,but when he is mad,he is not afraid to tear the person apart if they deserve it. But that is rare.  

If it is rare for him to tear a person apart when he is mad, how is he quick to anger?

Kronos314 wrote:Powers/Strengths: He has an immense amout of speed,endurance and stamina.He has limited time control,able to stop it completly and move around to dodge/attack. He is a living energy conduit. He can abosrb almost any kind of energy and store it to heal or for attacks. His reaction time is unparreleld as well.

Let's take this one at a time.

Kronos314 wrote:He has an immense amout of speed,endurance and stamina.

I feel that super human capabilities tend to be a normal thing for a lot of fan characters so I see no reason to touch this. 

Kronos314 wrote:He has limited time control,able to stop it completly and move around to dodge/attack. 

No. Time control is so overpowered and while everything has the potential to be overpowered this one takes the cake. Control over time is something I would leave untouched. It's OP.

Kronos314 wrote:He is a living energy conduit. He can abosrb almost any kind of energy and store it to heal or for attacks.

Nonononononononononono. No. Stop. Bad.

Kronos314 wrote:His reaction time is unparreleld as well.

Wouldn't that belong to Sonic? Reaction time has to do with speed, right? And since Sonic is the fastest, he should have the best reaction time to things, should he not? 

I dunno I may be getting that right but claiming your character is the best in something is also bad. Don't do that.

Kronos314 wrote:Weaknesses: He is gullible when nothing seems dangerous.He has a set amount of "Parodox Energy" that he emmits naturally and it has to recharge over a certain period of time to be at optimal power. He also can overload on energy. Though this can be directed as an attack,it hurts him when he does so. 

While some of these weaknesses are interesting, they do nothing to balance out the absurd strengths.

Kronos314 wrote:He has a set amount of "Parodox Energy" that he emmits naturally and it has to recharge over a certain period of time to be at optimal power. He also can overload on energy.

This is interesting at least. I dunno what Paradox energy is but whatevs.

Kronos314 wrote:Positive Relations: His relations with the people he works with alot. Like his Info guy,Mike Alozova. Guy's like a father figure to him as he is in his upper 50's.

Negitive Relations: Everybody who has a black heart and would use their power or money for greed.

Negative Relations sort of obvious wouldn't everyone have negative relations with those kinds of people? 
Otherwise fine. 

Kronos314 wrote:Anon was a regular hedgehog. He had a family,friends,and was safe. For a while,that is. One night,their house was dark. No one was awake,and all was peaceful. But three dangerous theives were about to change that. They picked the lock on the back door and sneaked through,picking up thing that may have some value. The mother woke up and heard noises downstairs. The father awoke also,and he went down to check on the house. The three intruders all turned and saw the father,who was carrying a baseball bat. On pulled out a knife and threw it at the father before he could react. The knife sliced into his neck and he fell without a word. Then the mother went down,unsure what was going on. She saw the father on the floor,dead. She rushed to his side on the ground and saw the knife sticking out of his neck. One of the other theives pulled out a silenced pistol and aimed at the mother. Before he could pull the trigger,Anon was at the top of the stairs and watched as his mother was shot,and she landed on top of his father. "NOOOO!!" he screamed,and the guy with the gun ran up the stairs to catch Anon. He ran back to his room and closed the door,blocking it with a chair to give him time. He found a jumprope and his in his closet. The thug broke through the door,but couldnt see Anon as he was hiding. He saw the window open and assumed he escaped. As he turned around though,Anon jumped on his back and wrapped the jumprope around his neck,choking him to death. Anon got up,shocked at what he did. He pushed it out of his mind,and grabbed the thug's gun. He ran downstairs and shot one thug in the head. He slumped down to the floor and the thug that had thrown the knife earliar had retreived it prior to Anon coming down the stairs. He threw it again,and Anon dodged the best he could. Sirens could be heard in the backround,and the one remaining thug ran out the door and drove off. The knife had plunged into the side of his neck,cutting the vocal cords and he passed out from Oxygen deprevation. Due to luck,the police and a ambulance arrived in time to save Anon. His parents,however,were long gone. He woke in a hospital,his neck and throat on fire and a tube down his throat,pumping O2 into his lungs. He bacame the guy you call when you have a problem

Oh boy. Let's do this.

Kronos314 wrote:But three dangerous theives were about to change that. They picked the lock on the back door and sneaked through,picking up thing that may have some value. The mother woke up and heard noises downstairs. 

Oh no. Suspense. 

Kronos314 wrote:The father awoke also,and he went down to check on the house. The three intruders all turned and saw the father,who was carrying a baseball bat. On pulled out a knife and threw it at the father before he could react. The knife sliced into his neck and he fell without a word.

I'm gonna say right now that if a burglar breaks in at night, they know people are going to be in the house. They came into the house with malicious intent, or at least knowing they'd have to kill people. But why? Why do they want to kill this family if that's the case? 

I would think otherwise they would break in at a time when they know no one is home. If not, why not just pick another target?

And of course the child sees his parents die.

Right.

I'm not gonna go over the rest of it I know how it goes and my questions remain the same. 
What kind of incompetent thieves (With a gun no less) can't catch and kill a child?
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Post by Kronos314 Sun Oct 12, 2014 10:43 pm

Keep in mind,he still has speed,just not as MUCH as it is now, So the thugs couldn't keep up. I will try and dumb down the powers...they are,i admit,OP. But can i say that he can still absorb SOME forms of energy? I like that one alot. Get rid of the Time thing.... Maybe the whole story.... *sighs* I'm clueless when it comes to this,but gimme time. I'll try to make it better.
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