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Character Bio - Sir Silencera Silence Onjharose the Hedgehog

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Post by JourneySoul Tue Mar 06, 2018 11:07 pm

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Name: Silencera Onjharose
Age: 19
Gender: Male
Species: Hedgehog
Race: Mobian

Height: 5’6”
Weight: 68 lbs
Fur: Very light sky blue; quills arch over head to droop on the left side; black markings on quills
Skin: Light apricot
Eyes: No irises; glowing white pupils
Additional Physical Features: None
Attire: Glistening silver armor and helm; visor usually covers eyes; long, midnight blue cape

Powers: Healing powers; skilled in sword combat; swift on his feet

Weaknesses: Using his healing powers results in a long period of weakness and lack of energy which MUST be replenished.

Weapons: Ryvales, Sword of Light (He is bound to the sword. If a man worthy of its power finds and wields it, Silence will appear to aid him. The sword also appears to his will and is connected to his soul.)

Background: Unknown

Personality: VERY wise; level headed; tranquil; silent; chival; polite; respectful; honorable; considerate


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Post by Spekkal Tue Mar 06, 2018 11:54 pm

Howdy! I'm going to have to interject for a moment here.


I really like the design of this character! However, there's a few things that clash with the rules on this forum. Mainly the matter of being overpowered! Let me just direct you to this thread post...
https://sonicrpnation.forumotion.com/t1-the-rules#153521
2. Don't make your character OP. This means: Stick to one form (unless you have a good excuse to have multiple), don't have them have too many powers and balance their powers and strengths out by weaknesses.
I gotta ask about his powers here! He has a LOT of abilities, bu the lack of weaknesses make him seem flawless.

  • 'Powers: Can restore balance; heal injured mortals; rid a soul or a land of great darkness; can fuse (two methods of fusion)'

What does 'restore balance' actually mean? How much can he heal? And I'm rather hesitant to have this character be able to cleanse entire lands of 'great darkness' as an ability. A lot of people use darkness and evil as a plot device, and it'll be very unfun if your character can negate it all :c You'll need to trim down the magnitude of powers this character has!

  • Weaknesses: A closely guarded secret

Um. Sorry to say but uh. With such an obscene amount of powers and abilities, you're gonna need to GREATLY balance this character. As I stated, you're making this character seem absolutely flawless, when their one singular weakness is massively guarded. You'll need to add a lot more flaws to this character to not make them as overpowered, and make them more balanced
Second point is fusions!

  • 1. The first method is a simple fusion. Its requirements are physical contact between the two fusers and deep concentration from both. One acquired, fusion is obtained. The fusion is a combination of both people and is controlled by both minds. 

So. Does this mean he can make two OCs become one? Because uh, while interesting on paper, I don't really agree with your character being able to do this unless you make it temporary for a start. I'd like more clarification on this if that's okay?

  • 2. The second method resembles being granted a super form. Its requirements are a worthy heart, one that Silence trusts and agrees with, and Silence to obtain his spirit form. The spirit transforms the user into a being of light, balance, health, and redemption; a holy figure. When fusion is obtained, the user controls the body, and Silence can communicate with the user mentally. 

And finally, uh. No pls. Being able to 'grant a super form' is pretty much borderline OP, especially since we don't allow super forms to begin with. Being able to make them a 'holy figure' is a no-go, sorry!




Fix these issues, and you'll be good to go! You have a good concept going here, and we're happy to help! c:
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Post by JourneySoul Tue Mar 06, 2018 11:55 pm

K, thanks!!

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Post by JourneySoul Wed Mar 07, 2018 12:00 am

Fixed!!

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Post by Spekkal Wed Mar 07, 2018 12:05 am

Wonderful, thankyou! Much appreciated!
I see no further issues c:
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Post by JourneySoul Wed Mar 07, 2018 12:06 am

You’re welcome!!!

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